That was a fun and different ending... brilliant
Gorgeous poem, darling Helen!xoxox,CCP.S. Missed Project Runway... maybe they will air a rerun?
A sense of emptiness - well captured..bkm
the key to one's memories is important...very smart twist of the prompt.lovely magpie!
great magpie- I enjoyed how you wove the words around the image
An air of sadness here. Very nicely written.
wonderfully written...and yes a touch sad for one who have watched those that have lost that key...nice magpie.
I love your unique take on the prompt. Very well done.
A different approach -- and that's good.
so thoughtful with just a few words...
Now who would have expected the treasure-box would be empty? Not me. It was a twist, and I liked it. It was like a little wake-up call. And perhaps that is the beauty, over time all is forgotten, who really cares after so long a time?As I read your words, "rusted over, tangles, beneath", I began to think about a treasure buried on a sunken ship.....and sometimes that does happen, we-- they finally rescue the sunken treasure, when opened, it is empty. Love it!
Beautiful words - sad words as they are so accurate.
That's erfect, just as it is. I'll read more - after I've had a think!
A strong metaphor for memory loss, a lock but nothing inside and no key - well done.
Just so pretty and a bit sad.
Wonderfully written! Excellent magpie!-Weasel
But she holds them within forever..very nice take...
Well-written. I know such people at a nursing home, and may be one of them some day.
Wonderful interpretation, Helen. A beautiful, engaging write, tinged with tragedy.
A beautiful way to express something that is so tragic.
Stolen memories. So poignantly sad.
Memories of your mother's last years. If I was your analyst that's where I would take you becaue it's where you took me. Stolen memories indeed! Poignant poem Helen!
Very witty, I bsolutely loved the twist. :)
I find I just don't have time to read all the responses, which I love... there is a limit one can spend on this machine,but wherever I go, there are traces that you have been there before me. How do you do it?
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Argh! Hard-hitting. A real punch. Very well done. I'm glad I stopped by.
everything stolen ! oh- maybe time did it ? it took me back, nice one-
brilliant!I love it, well done
Oooh -- nice ending. Well done.
Alzheimer's. Very sad, but well voiced.
Pointed and poignant. This works visually as well.
I really like this. Your use of the word 'etched' is particularly striking because it signifies that it is not just the lock that is etched but the memories. Very moving.
Several interpretations of this, each one finely tuned. Poignant piece.
The lost of memories - the worst and most profound lost. It is really the lost of one's true treasures.Lovely and totally sad, Helen.
Helen, This was very very nice!I just loved the powerful first line.Short but amazing!
Oh maaan!! Didn't expect that end!! I was stunned!Am still quite speechless really!It was fantastic!!! I am still wondering.. what would it be like...
Amazing Magpie :)Some really beautiful words in there :)
Oh how poignant and beautiful.
Great Poem Helen form begining to end but I really enjoyed the end "Nothing inside...everything stolen." So brash and so revealing. Thank you for sharing.
The ending says it all. Very powerful, moving poem. Thank you.