Monday, February 21, 2011

Tanka ~ Cuckoo's Nest



movie still ~~ 'One Flew Over The Cuckoo's Nest'


watching with others
men destruct before my eyes 
flying over nests
cuckoos are frying their brains
their souls forever vanquished





18 comments:

  1. This is wonderful! And your new header. June Sinder, author of Modern Woman in Search of Soul, says, "Water and particularly the ocean -- being murky, teeming with unseen organisms, and infinitely extensive --is a metaphor par excellence for the unconscious." .....or soul, making your blogsite an introduction to the soul, or seeking soul, or looking for soul....could have many interpretations.

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  2. This is very energetic! A good, solid, complex in thought tanka.

    Very good. Now...do more. You have an excellent start.

    Lady Nyo

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  3. whew wowee good one! Captured the whole essence of that play.

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  4. Great take on Tanka and on this play and film....you convey its story well....bkm

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  5. Good for you. I wasn't even brave enough to attempt one!

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  6. Fabulous! You have so captured the story as well as the form. Well done.

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  7. see i needed these cliff notes in school...smiles. tight write...

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  8. Wow! I've been doing haiku but have not been able to put together a tanka. Well done! Cuckoo's Nest leaves an indelible impression, doesn't it?

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  9. a fitting response to a masterpiece!

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  10. I too saw a play recently of this... I was an emotional wreck... Nice Tanka!

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  11. Ah, well done with the form. These are deceivingly simple looking, but really hard to do well.

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  12. Hi Helen ~~ This is full of energy and feeling, similar to the old panty raids we had in college back in the 50's. It reminded me of the professionals just now on TV's 'Dancing with the Stars' with the guy's rubber-like legs going wild!

    Thank you for the paragraph on the Tanka. I use these quite often when my Senryū or Haiku just doesn't tell all I want it to. My second set of seven are supposed to be taking off from the third line and related to but on a different bent from the first three lines. Most of them, that is. XD
    ..

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  13. Brought back images of the play... great form.

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  14. This movie (and the book) made such an impression on me.

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  15. Wonderful! And you gave a very clear explanation of the tanka form, one of those that I find challenging.

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