Monday, June 20, 2011

Magpie 70


Who Are You?

an elusive phantom 
one who sees herself
through a prism of fantasy
your perception is not reality
by no means the authentic you
you are but a shadow 
sleepwalking through life
an evaporated beauty




25 comments:

  1. our perception is many times not reality...rather hard on ourselves...love that last line too...

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  2. Oh, wonderful. Beautifully done.
    — K

    Kay, Alberta, Canada
    An Unfittie's Guide to Adventurous Travel

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  3. "An evaporated beauty." A great image.

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  4. Love what you have done with this piece, both in the image and the words. Fabulous write.

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  5. oh excellent- well done! Wow.

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  6. I loved the line "the evaporated beauty", in fact this marked the essence of the poem. Beautiful!

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  7. 'Through the prism of fantasy'.....Gee that's a fantastic line!!

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  8. Not many responses to the prompt have asks your question. Well constructed.

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  9. She remains the mysterious beauty, especially as she turns into a negative..love what you did with the whole thing!

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  10. I have to agree, the ending is a, wow. Terrific write.

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  11. ...sleepwalking through life...

    Not the way I want to do it. Very sad, really.

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  12. excellent helen! our authentic selves so rarely are visible. very stirring piece!

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  13. wow Helen..I'll have what you're having

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  14. Beautiful! So much depth in this piece!

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  15. "An evaporated beauty" Gorgeous! You are so right too few people see what lies underneath appearances

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  16. Beautiful. She looks amazingly haunting in the reverse.

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  17. wow mom, you're out there! love you, me

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  18. an evaporated beauty...great image...bkm

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  19. Brilliant idea to use the negative image, and an inspired interpretation. That last line is a humdinger!

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  20. Loved your elusive phantom- our eyes have much in common, methinks...

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  21. thought-provoking.

    smiles.


    share 1 to 3 poems with poetry potluck week 41 today.

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