Sunday, December 18, 2011

Magpie 96

'Shadow Play' ~ 1966 ~ Lee Friedlander



Body Language

arms crossed she braces
terrified you will harm her
as you have so many times

stay away .. go no closer
her safe zone is
reserved for people she trusts

how like you to wait until she is alone
to make a move
stay away .. go no closer




32 comments:

  1. Yes, there is an ominous vibe about this photo. I didn't really hone in on the arms crossed. ... come no closer, even as she smiles for all else to see.

    Nicely done, Helen.

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  2. Excellent! And good advice to this menacing being - Stay away, come no close.

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  3. That personal space is so important. Nice one.

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  4. i seriously cant stand people that try to intimidate that way...ugh...nice take on this...

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  5. Wow! Dark and frightened and frightening in tone. You took this one in a very different direction from most, which I like very much!

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  6. i like how you used the pop psych phrases to compose this piece

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  7. A strong piece...invasion of personal space..a command to not come any closer...nice work.

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  8. A nice response to an egimatic prompt this week.

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  9. I saw this as a dark one, too, Helen and am surprised as all getout that some found beauty there. This Magpie community is so darned fascinating!

    Your take on this is so on point. I bet most psychologists out there would like the way you honed in on the body language.

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  10. I read 'costumes' (not) consume!
    almost a song- thanks.

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  11. Well thought-out, well expressed, well posted...

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  12. Wow! I was just trying to kiss you :-D Excellent interpretation of the image.

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  13. She does seem stand-off-ish; like come on, come on, enough already.
    I think it's so cool how we see the differences in the same object.
    rel

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  14. I think the opening is the best line: "Arms crossed I hold myself in"

    (rosemarymint.wordpress.com)

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  15. I too have got the shivers from this unearthly creature..where to hide? well done!!

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  16. Good Magpie, Helen. I ended up ignoring the folded arms because I wanted to emphasize the receptiveness of the smile.I agree that the very different responses are fascinating.

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  17. Yes... that smile can be taken to be one of the supercilious. Perhaps a frightened person, too. Nice take.

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  18. A wonderful read. I wouldn't want her taking a step too close either!


    Oh, and just in case I'm not around, I'll wish you a very MERRY CHRISTMAS now Helen...x

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  19. I like this. It is a bit sad, but I like it all the same. Nice write! :)

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  20. Some how there is a lot of menace in the prompt - well done Helen

    Happy holidays

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  21. You can only allow a smirk! Nobody has the right to harass or violate. Stake your ground,nobody's hurting!
    Clever verse!

    Hank

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  22. I like that you focused on the folded arms protecting her from the shadow invading her space.

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  23. Tricky prompt, but you produced an excellent response.

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  24. There is a sinister aspect to this photo. Excellent write! Thank you.

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  25. Intense and well crafted......love this Helen!!

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  26. Well-crafted poem, Helen! That shadow does indeed look ominous.

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  27. Ooer - that's frightening! Excellent write.

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  28. The essence of fear in a relationship - well written.

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  29. Visiting from dVerse. Not an easy picture. Words didn't come for me, but YOU did well.

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  30. Yes, I share that feeling you express so well. My first thoughts were of an official photo of victims of Auschwitz!

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  31. I enjoyed this from the first line. Perfect take on the image, and the refrain is a great echo of the ominous feeling the picture gives. Well done!

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