Saturday, April 28, 2012

Vampire Lugosi


V oluptuous perfection .. he watches
A s she sleeps .. dreaming of
M ansions and ball gowns .. he has
P lotted his next move .. fangs plunged 
I nto her soft white neck .. pulse 
R aces .. a hardening he cannot control
E very fiber of his being .. on fire
S leep my beauty .. sleep


16 comments:

  1. Ooh, Helen... I like! I had to laugh at her dreams of mansions and ball gowns...

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  2. Loved it. Very nicely done, my eyes were happily moving around :)

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  3. smiles...ya know...i'm sure her dreams will become much more intense and exciting when he finally bites her...who really wants to dream of mansions and ball gowns anyway...just saying...smiles...nice take..

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  4. I like the contrast of her dreams, with the reality of his fangs biting into her...And I like the picture you chose ~

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  5. Very nice Acrostic here. That photograph is perfectly mirrored in your verse. Terrific job. Thanks

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  6. very cool and I too like the acrostic ... mind telling me where your blog's main pic is from (the metal horse sculpture?) I keep feeling I've seen it recently but just can't remember where and it's bothering me (it's also very cool)

    http://thepoet-tree-house.blogspot.ca/2012/04/on-paris-night.html

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  7. LOL... Lucky man on all counts! (pun intended) :)

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  8. Really liked the way you played with form here (acrostic, learned a new word today, thanks Fred!). This was fun and the contrast between her dreams and his desire was very battle of the sexes.

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  9. ahem, perhaps he should lay off the little blue pill on nights he goes hunting...grins....haha...nice acrostic, and classic vapirism....

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  10. Had a nice laugh at Brian's comment and her dreams of mansions, well played acrostic.

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  11. An acrostic poem! That's pretty rare, but you executed that rather well.

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  12. There she is just dreaming of ball gowns....what's a girl to do when Mr. Tall Dark and Handsome enters her boudoir?!!

    This was great. I was going to tell you that I wrote a "word poem" two weeks ago for Flash Fiction 55 but our host has been in the hospital so we haven't posted 55s. And, hah! Now I learn from Samuel's comment that it is an "acrostic poem." :)

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  13. Elections he cannot control? What...?

    OHHHH. "Erections". Gotcha.

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  14. Hah. This is so good. What a dirty old man, that Lugosi.

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  15. I have never seen a vampire with his clothes off. Clearly, you have! Naughty Helen!

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