Sunday, May 12, 2013

Magpie 168

Old Couple ~~ Togan Gokbakar



just look
you know who wears
the pants in this twosome 
the look on her face says volumes
bored to tears, she merely pretends to hear 
nothing he says is relevant
hand the gal a cigar
she wears the pants 
just look

Rictameter ~ nine line poetry form ~ 2, 4, 6, 8, 10, 8, 6, 4, 2 syllables ~ first and last lines are the same




21 comments:

  1. Astute and witty; good combo.

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  2. Un couple français,
    isolé, égocentrique,
    il n'importe pas.
    C'est aujourd-hui
    simplement.
    il n'y a pas de quoi.

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    1. Bear! Are you suggesting I am egocentric? Il n'importe pas .. I still care.

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  3. Certainly looks that way to me. Nice one.

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  4. haha it def looks that way to me...lol..
    just carry the bags and keep your mouth shut...smiles

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  5. Oh, she obviously wears the pants, and what does he have on underneath? Oh, we'll leave that up to her to tell us. A good take on those two.

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  6. Oh my, are you tuned in to Cad and Ada? LOL

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  7. This is wonderful. Definitely her face screams volumes. Great lines.

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  8. Oh Gawd, she's talking at me again!

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  9. Perhaps she is the rock upon which all things break themselves

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  10. Nice new form Helen and wonderfully crafted!

    Hank

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  11. Interesting form, interesting to conjecture what is going through their minds.

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  12. She certainly looks as though she could blow rings around him.

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  13. oh yeah- and she probably tells him when to get his hair cut! You captured this image perfectly! Have a great day Helen!!

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  14. But still together..no doubt,forever! Life is on their faces....

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  15. great poem; wonderful use of the form; and yes, there is so much of a story in this simple pic! oh, that look on her face! bravo!

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  16. Clever and enjoyable write - I think she definitely wears the trousers!

    Anna :o]

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  17. I think we all know couples like that...

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