I have left footprints
on the very edge
of your sanity
embedded
saturated
in shades of fuchsia
the color of my sin.
Should you retrace
my steps
you will discover
the kind of person
I have been
and you will hate me
for every indiscretion ..
for every horrific
thing I've done.
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Masterfully done, Helen!! Wowww 💝💝 I soo adore; "saturated with fuchsia / the color of my sin / impossible to forget / forgive /" thank you so much for writing to the prompt! I LOVE IT!
ReplyDeleteSimply brilliant
ReplyDeleteYesssss...
ReplyDeletePowerful!
ReplyDeleteDearest Helen,
ReplyDeleteTo me, you might have clung to rocky shores but looking like a lovely fuchsia bougainvillea, you no way did become a villain! 🤗
Hugs,
Mariette
Well done
ReplyDeleteHappy Tuesday
Much💖love
oh wow, this is a wonderful twist/flip stepping off point from your chosen inspiration - and I have to say, this has an Anne Sexton feel to it .... it certainly speaks for itself .... great job!
ReplyDeleteYou've woven this together with grand skill! A poignant confession!
ReplyDeleteWe chose the same lines, Helen. I love the confession but hopefully, it brings something good from the past.
ReplyDeleteVulnerable. I love this. And your artistry shows in your pictures as well. Fuchsia, huh?! I love it. And you. You say so much in all your short posts and I don't understand how to do that. I love it all. Thanks for sharing.
ReplyDeleteWonderfully done, Helen - you take Sanaa's beautiful line and dance with it!
ReplyDeleteyou will hate me /
ReplyDeletefor every indiscretion /
for every thing i've done.
Love the admission. You did well to cushion the impact with your kind words, Helen!
Hank
Amazingly expressed, Helen! Honest confession.
ReplyDeleteLove how the boldness of fuchsia is paired with the boldness of this confession. This piece lays it all on the table unapologetically.
ReplyDeleteI love how you went deep with the color... fuchsia is so vibrant so how can it be vile?
ReplyDeleteOh my Helen, dark, deep, a surrender to imperfection, and a recognition of inevitability — yet quite beautifully written!
ReplyDeleteWow Helen, absolutely poisonous. Excellent response.
ReplyDeleteWow, Helen. This one really blows me away.
ReplyDeleteYours,
David [ben Alexander]
Wow! This just pulls you along and through, it's so compelling.
ReplyDeleteHelen,
ReplyDeleteAs a confessional poem, this is devastatingly authentic and pure. The words reach their target. Such a perfect pitch and tone of honesty that it's a little scary. Loved it.
pax,
dora
Profound and dark and yet still beautiful, Helen. I'm sure you would be forgiven, you're far too charming :-)
ReplyDeleteDon't know how I missed this blazing confession! WOW. Bravo
ReplyDeleteIs there no hope, then, for the speaker at all?
ReplyDeleteI like that image of leaving footprints at the edge of someone's sanity... toxic yes, but brilliantly imagined.
ReplyDeleteA powerful statement and a brave confession – but a sin coloured fuschia might be impossible to resist or repent!
ReplyDeleteThis is scary, Helen. I can't imagine a sin I couldn't forgive. I might not all, but when it wasn't because of the sin, rather the person.
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Nonsense....you are not capable of doing anything horrific at all....Love the pic !
ReplyDeleteYou make me want to applaud this Jezebel's fuchsia audacity. She makes no apology and asks for no forgiveness. What a character you've written.
ReplyDeleteI'm with Debi. I fully appreciate that even while admitting her "sins", she doesn't diminish herself. It's all about what the other person will say, never about caring much for the opinion.
ReplyDeleteWhat a character!
ReplyDeleteHow well you crafted this despicable person. :)
Wow! You’ve let me see the other side with your words.
ReplyDeleteMay as well flaunt it if you've got it! This would be the point in a musical where the villain belts out an unforgettable show stopper.
ReplyDeleteI love that first stanza! It is awesome. Nothing like leaving your footprints on the edge of someone else's sanity - it is such a great description.
ReplyDeleteWow, Helen! Just wow. Love the whole write. And the image of you spraying clouds of pink - is that a graffiti gun? :-D :-D
ReplyDeleteSins not scarlet, but fuchsia!
ReplyDeleteIs there hope for this person? Is person capable of repentance? I don't claim to understand these things.
There is always hope, Priscilla ....
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