Dissonance in poetry is a tool we rarely use in our writing, but deliberately used it may add an unsettling emotion that is crucial to describing unpleasant topics. Bjorn is hosting today in the dVerse Poets Pub and the focus is on, yes .. dissonance.
off key harmonies
mothers
and daughters collide
dissonant voices
half a step from perfection
lyrics better left unsung
Some of the worst dissonances happens in being closer than whats comforting.
ReplyDeleteWell.....it has always upset me very much when I witness that bruising...even now thinking about it...
ReplyDeleteSome things are better left unsaid, after that collision. Good one Helen.
ReplyDeleteThis is so poignant! Yes, dissonances are likely to occur in relationships such as these .. sigh...
ReplyDeleteI have three daughters, and each, in their turn, collided with their mother, but I used dialogue and family meetings to smooth the waters.
ReplyDeleteWell said.
ReplyDeleteAnd some things, as you have pointed out in your poem, are better left unsaid.
Nice one, Helen. :)
ReplyDeleteI've been there. (K)
ReplyDeletesuccinct and thus such impact - well done Helen
ReplyDeleteWith such few words, yet we understood immediately. Well done Helen
ReplyDeletePowerful conflict described elegantly~
ReplyDeleteDearest Helen,
ReplyDeleteSo honest and true and I love the line: lyrics better left unsung.
Hugs,
Mariette
Brilliant. Just a half step apart but there's so much distance.
ReplyDeleteHelen, most of us have heard/played that tune...cringeworthy!
ReplyDeleteTwo generations will always be on different pages of time.
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