Bjorn is hosting Meeting the Bar in the Pub ~~ we are challenged with using "kennings" in our poems ~~ a figuratively-phrased compound word that is used in place of a simple single-word noun.
watching
through half-moon eyes
wondering where
those ghost-rings drift and fade
waiting for the next
breath-cloud sigh
wishing you would
cast eye-lanterns my way
share the soul-secret
buried deep inside
Beautiful, Helen! I especially like breath-cloud sigh.
ReplyDeleteDearest Helen,
ReplyDeleteIt is very rare and unique for being able to look inside someone's soul through their eyes. With Pieter I could do that—looking deep inside and he in mine.
Hugs,
Mariette
Nicely kenned.
ReplyDeleteThanks for drpopping by my blog
Much♡love
Straight in, beautiful rhythm to this verse, the rhythm helped by the alliteration, and tenseness of the half moon eyes..when you start a poem so beautifully the rest reads like a dream. Real psychology here...I find myself relating to your words..
ReplyDeleteNicely done, Helen, I especially love ‘ghost-rings and ‘soul-secret’.
ReplyDeleteLove them all and the kennings added so much visuals to the poem
ReplyDeleteYour kennings give the poem a natural flow, nothing forced about it at all. Lovely!
ReplyDeleteWow! Beautifully done! Really really good.
ReplyDeleteEye-lanterns! That's it, Helen. Nailed it!
ReplyDeleteSuch a nice write Helen — thank you for sharing… 🙂 ✌🏼✌🏼🫶🏼
ReplyDeleteFor your next poem I would like you to find a way to share that intriguing soul-secret with us (even thought that would be telling). You got me there.
ReplyDeleteI feel the yearning in this, Helen. Favorite line:
ReplyDelete"cast eye-lanterns my way"