In the dverse poets pub, Laura presents us with a "Palinode form" challenge ~ two stanzas, one contradicting the other!
1.
the old year disappears into nothingness
a fleeting shadow lost in time's relentless stream
its joy and laughter ~ gone with fading light
a ghostly trace of what once felt divine
i mourn the past slipped from my grasp
each moment's glow dissolved with dawn's advance
i clutch at yesterday ~ knowing it's a futile task
life moves forward in its ceaseless race
and time unbending offers not another chance
2.
but wait ~ what of the echoes in its wake
tender threads of memories gently spun
the old year lingers still with every step i take
a bridge of gold beneath the setting sun
it whispers truth ~ my guide along the path unknown
its painful losses teach ~ joys still light my sky
last year has not left ~ though shadows it did spread
it shaped me ~ offered hope for this brand new year
for gifts unseen ~ gifts that never die

I love your sad opening and then your hopeful recovery. Well done Helen.
ReplyDeleteVery nicely done, Helen. I love the lines:
ReplyDelete‘i mourn the past slipped from my grasp
each moment's glow dissolved with dawn's advance’
and the reminder of continuity in the lines:
‘tender threads of memories gently spun
the old year lingers still with every step i take’.
Helen this is a charming Palinode - full of contrary feelings for what has been and what remains and what will be. A beautiful read.
ReplyDeleteI see so little positive for the new year... but maybe it has to get even worse before it gets better.
ReplyDeleteNice one
ReplyDeleteHAPPY NEW YEAR
much♡love
Beautiful palinode. I too loved this line; mourn the past slipped from my grasp
ReplyDeleteeach moment's glow dissolved with dawn's advance’ lovely.
Georgina at navasolanature. This is very much a turning of the year reflection with memory and then hope. I love your rhyming as it just fits in and allows the poem’s ideas and emotions to flow.
ReplyDeleteWhat a beautiful palinode, Helen! I love hope threaded through the second stanza. We live in hope.
ReplyDeleteThis is beautiful, Helen! I love that you recognize that we build upon our past, not shed it completely.
ReplyDeleteYvette M Calleiro :-)
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This poem has a beautiful flow to it, and of course, a positive ending.
ReplyDeleteSome absolutely stunning moments almost casually hidden in a verse that almost let's the past slip through it's fingers before discovering it has shaped the writer. Helen you are a true poet, who here has toyed with the reader, before putting him/her down again gently, and washing your finger at them again...next time, one feels, you might not let them off softly...! As blogspot insists I am Anon, then Ain I shall remain...
ReplyDeleteYe gods wagging, not washing.
DeleteSuch a beautiful melody of thoughts, Helen, the song of loss and contrapuntal music of hope. Beautifully composed.
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