It's Tuesday in the dVerse Poets Pub ~ time for Poetics ~ Kim challenges us to write poems beginning with a "hook line" ~ guaranteed to draw the reader in!
Visceral reactions / trying to squash them / next to impossible
fist clenches / air goes thick / with heat of withheld words
my world tilts / men scream into microphones
careless words / tossed like stones
ice caps / leak into oceans
children slam doors / on futures they cannot name
Visceral reactions / trying to squash them / next to impossible
I say to myself / be reasonable / stay rational
but my bones know better / humming with age old alarm
fires i'd hoped we'd extinguished / my body remembers
my mind / begs for peace
demanding much more / than patient endurance
Your stream-of-consciousness opening lines hooked me, Helen, and I could feel the world tilting, the frustration and anger. Maybe it's better to not attempt to squash the visceral reactions, but wait for them to pass.
ReplyDeleteCohen said "I don't trust my inner feelings/ inner feelings come and go." But, they sure can demand attention, can't they?
ReplyDeleteI can feel your steam building in the boiler! Very well done, Helen.
ReplyDeleteWe're living in very trying times!
ReplyDeleteI can feel the tensions rising and boiling over. Love this part: careless words / tossed like stones
ReplyDeleteSometimes, you just have to let the words flow. The following is cause to worry as what will their futures be like 7 generations from now what will remain. sigh...
ReplyDeletechildren slam doors / on futures they cannot name
I so feel this Helen. "..my body remembers/my mind / begs for peace.." Every day. I never thought our lives would see these overwrought and visceral times rebirth themselves.
ReplyDeleteWelcome to the deep end of distracted humanity. Hard to fathom it, hope to endure it.
ReplyDeletePowerful poem, Helen!
ReplyDeleteYvette M Calleiro :-)
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Such a gorgeous stream-of-consciousness poem this is, Helen! ❤️❤️
ReplyDeleteHard to be patient during these times, not when peace is in flight.
ReplyDeleteI wish there would be an escape from this....
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