Monday, May 1, 2023

Doomed




we were hopeless at chess

jumping each other


like playing leapfrog

{ a child's game }


mapping strategies

destined to fail


knights stumbling

rooks crashing


time to break rank

gather up pieces, move on


you were never my king

i was never your queen








18 comments:

  1. I love this. Such a powerful metaphor. Love the strong verbs: stumbling, crashing. Yes. I've been there.

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  2. I love the extended chess metaphor, Helen.

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  3. Oh, this is wonderful, Helen! What a great metaphor, and it flows so well.

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  4. When two play at love and neither wants to play by the rules, both lose. Those last 2 lines say it all. Nicely done, Helen!

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  5. We need not play the games. I love this!

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  6. I love chess, but not stumbling knights or crashing rooks.❤️

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  7. Really good, Helen...yes, strategies destined to fail!

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  8. I like this take on the prompt. Good quadrille.

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  9. Not a good ending with the last 2 lines. Time to move on!

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  10. Perhaps, the game was destined to fail. Interesting take on the word map. Truedessa

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  11. I love what you did with this prompt. Well done.

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  12. Wow! What a "stumble" through. Hole there were lessons learnt playing the game.

    Muchđź’–love

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  13. Oh yes, it's like that. I learned chess in college playing against the city, Lincoln, Nebraska, college town, champ. It got so that I could beat him about one of three games. I never played in competition.
    ..

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  14. That time when we were simply playing... life was easier then.

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  15. Ha! Oh Helen, you make me laugh! It definitely be like that sometimes!

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  16. Sometimes we know the end of the game at the beginning. I wonder why we keep on playing...

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  17. Ha ha, looking at the literal interpretation, I have to say I was always hopeless at chess myself for that same reason – kept wanting to play it like checkers. (Yes, probably a bit like that in relationships too: impatient.)

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  18. Hi Helen, I'm posting here for your "imagine, forty summers ago" posted for the post this week. It lacks a 'click here' button for comments.
    ..
    The memories that writer must have,
    maybe it was for the better they separated.
    Very nice, now we know.
    ..

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I appreciate each of you and the comments you leave ~~ thanks so much.