Monday, March 4, 2024

Nightfall

 Monday in dVerse Poets Pub ~  time for a Quadrille! Punam has given us the word 'slumber' to use in our poems! ZZzzzzzzz




in the darkness of night

slumber will not come

this hour, these moments

belong to us 


Debussy is playing

when the nocturne ends

I wonder, will we ever end


in the darkness of night

slumber will not come

this hour, these moments

ours   




Posted by Helen at 11:49 AM
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26 comments:

  1. GraceMarch 4, 2024 at 12:15 PM

    These moments are intimately ours - no slumbering now. Thanks for joining in Helen.

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  2. Kim M. RussellMarch 4, 2024 at 12:21 PM

    I love the ambiguity of your poem, Helen. It could be someone who cannot sleep because they are sad or in trouble, or it could be passionate lovers unable to sleep!

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  3. paeansunpluggedMarch 4, 2024 at 12:38 PM

    And one should make the most of these hours, slumbering can wait! Love this, Helen.

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  4. DoraMarch 4, 2024 at 12:41 PM

    A beautifully wistful write, Helen. Debussy sets the tone and the repetition works its magic in the "darkness." A lovely quadrille.

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  5. Gillena CoxMarch 4, 2024 at 1:15 PM

    Who needs slumber in Debussy moments😊

    Much♡love

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  6. Merril D. SmithMarch 4, 2024 at 1:38 PM

    I'm with Kim. I also like that this could be lovers who will not be sleeping or someone awake with their memories. Beautiful, Helen.

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  7. Mariette VandenMunckhof-VedderMarch 4, 2024 at 3:00 PM

    Dearest Helen,
    No need to slumber when enjoying Debussy's nocturne!
    Hugs,
    Mariette

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  8. DaleMarch 4, 2024 at 4:02 PM

    This is beautiful, Helen. So many reasonsn for not slumbering... I should have thought of Debussy for mine!

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  9. CarolMarch 4, 2024 at 6:37 PM

    Beautifully romantic! :D

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  10. Dwight L. RothMarch 4, 2024 at 7:22 PM

    Very nice, Helen. Some nights are like that!

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  11. Mrityunjay DixitMarch 4, 2024 at 11:28 PM

    Great poem, Helen.

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  12. NickMarch 5, 2024 at 4:20 AM

    This is beautiful, Helen ❤️

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  13. pvcann.comMarch 5, 2024 at 4:29 AM

    I enjoyed the subtle change in the repetition which for me went from a general sense of not sleeping to a shared sense. I love the feel of this poem.

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  14. SusanMarch 5, 2024 at 5:24 AM

    This is wonderful, Helen. The repetition reminds me of the thoughts that repeat in our heads when we attempt to rest. 👏💕

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  15. KerfeMarch 5, 2024 at 6:02 AM

    You've created a wonderful intimacy Helen. The repetition reinforces the connection.

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  16. Jane DoughertyMarch 5, 2024 at 8:08 AM

    I love the repetition making those the words that matter.

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  17. MishMarch 5, 2024 at 8:22 AM

    I like the gentle way the night eludes to romance....the wishing and wondering.

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  18. K.HartlessMarch 5, 2024 at 4:43 PM

    You capture that cycle of slumber well.

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  19. Kim GloverMarch 5, 2024 at 6:45 PM

    The fragility of love - and appreciation of it - are what I take from this lovely poem.

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  20. grapelingMarch 5, 2024 at 7:58 PM

    DeBussy is an excellent solace for when the muse of sleep refuses to visit ~

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  21. kittysversesMarch 6, 2024 at 12:25 AM

    Beautiful, Helen. You choose to wait, I like it. :)

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  22. ben AlexanderMarch 6, 2024 at 11:42 AM

    For me, your repetition of the phrase "in the darkness of night" enhances the sense of intimacy and connection!

    Sincerely,
    David
    SkepticsKaddish.com

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  23. Ken / rivrvlogrMarch 6, 2024 at 2:11 PM

    For years, I would go to sleep to the sound of classical music... Debussy, Grieg, or RImsky-Korsakov.

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  24. JimMarch 6, 2024 at 5:50 PM

    At our house we go to sleep watching "Murder she wrote" reruns.
    When I haven't reached sleep within fifteen minutes I get up, work a puzzle or read on a book. Maybe make a cup of hot chocolate using the Keurig machine for hot water. I have to be careful or I go to sleep doing one of those two busy items. Nice thoughts, Helen. I don't listen to Debussy type music.
    ..

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  25. Nicole HorlingsMarch 8, 2024 at 8:47 AM

    Great poem! I have struggles with insomnia, and this felt quite relatable.

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  26. purplepeninportland.comMarch 9, 2024 at 5:18 PM

    Beautiful, Helen. We both love Debussy!

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I appreciate each of you and the comments you leave ~~ thanks so much.

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