Lillian is focused on the end of 2021!!
careening through life
blips, blurs on our storyboards
you the subject me your
predicate
diagrammed with flawless precision
we crossed invisible boundaries
boulevards lined with see through trees
umbrellas dripping, shimmering in full
sunlight
you the painter me the poser
a perfect double exposure

Looks like a fun adventure for you. Make it come alive in your storyboard.
ReplyDeleteWell! You had me at the third line, being an old English teacher! I LOVE what you've done here:
ReplyDelete"you the subject, I your predicate"
"you the painter, I the poser"
and then the perfect double exposure.
Just a wonderful write and use of the word.
Brought a smile. Truly lovely.
ReplyDeleteI love it... such a wonderful way to live... careening with a good companion must be the best.
ReplyDeleteWhat a lovely adventure!
ReplyDeleteThe painter and the poser are joined, I loved this!
ReplyDeleteThe image of 'transparent trees' is so beautiful...
ReplyDeleteMuch love,
David [ben Alexander]
Love this!
ReplyDelete"you the subject I your predicate
diagrammed with flawless precision"
And then the final lines!
Enjoyed the metaphors, your title is so fitting, what a ride! 😍
ReplyDeleteCan't have art without paint AND canvas. Best tangos have TWO dancers. Great work, Helen.
ReplyDeleteDearest Helen,
ReplyDeleteA very lovely poem with so much meaning in it.
Hugs,
Mariette
This is absolutely beautiful! I love; "boulevards lined with transparent trees."💝💝
ReplyDeleteyou the painter I the poser
ReplyDeletea perfect double exposure
Truly a perfect combination, Helen! A measure of a little danger can be very exciting
Hank
Exciting dynamic and utterly charming! What a fun (careening) read, Helen!
ReplyDeletepax,
dora
Nice work poet — gorgeous! Please come and visit me, share your likes and your truth! Would love to have you!
ReplyDeleteWOW! You are producing some great stuff of late, my friend. Using the conjugation of a sentence is a brilliant move, and you've done it gloriously!
ReplyDeleteLove it! This, especially:
ReplyDelete"you the subject I your predicate"
'you the painter I the poser
ReplyDeletea perfect double exposure' - wonderful end lines to a superb quadrille.
So fast it flies.
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