Meeting The Bar in dVerse Poets Pub. Laura asks us to write a poem of eleven lines using the first line of a poem we published during January - November 2023 .. one line each month. Finding the perfect line is going to be quite a challenge. Click on each line should you want to read my poem.
Wonderful Helen, your lines go together like you wrote them all this evening!
ReplyDeleteWhat a superb poem, Helen! Love it!
ReplyDeleteDearest Helen,
ReplyDeleteHaha, forty summers ago lake water was warm—that stands out!
Hugs,
Mariette
That giddy feeling dreaming of warm water with pops of color everywhere... it is like a consisten poem
ReplyDeleteA seamless combination of lines, Helen, and I’d love to know what the strange request was! You captured the ‘city's rush and throng’ in the ‘pops of color everywhere’ and the giddy feeling.
ReplyDeleteThis is absolutely splendid! The lines merge together to tell us a poignant story. I love; "I dream in measures, keys and tempos forty summers ago lake water was warm." 💝💝💝
ReplyDeleteThis is excellent Helen. I often feel this way myself.
ReplyDeleteSuch a cool prompt. I did it once and was amazed that a theme appeared in my work and the poem made total sense. Smiles. As does yours. I love it!
ReplyDeleteI love the flow of the poem, and how you navigate us through the dreamlike scenery you created.
ReplyDeleteThis is so coherent, Helen it feels and reads like a poem, written from scratch. Great job my friend. 🙂✌🏼🫶🏼
ReplyDeleteLove it. In particular the great finale
ReplyDelete"i often find it immersive and quite pleasant; losing track of time
oh the giddy feeling"
This flows so well! I especially love the last 4 lines together...and somehow, the giddiness is a perfect ending!
ReplyDeleteReads like you wrote it as one, not eleven lines! I love the American Sentence line, I often find it immersive and quite pleasant; losing track of time. How clever of you to think of linking instead of listing! I wish I'd done that. So much easier.
ReplyDeleteHelen, you weave a captivating tapestry of diverse themes and emotions. From the impossible request to the immersive warmth of lake water, the verses create a delightful blend!
ReplyDeleteSincerely,
David
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